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>>46772
Before I start critiquing, I think your writing is pretty good, I think your world sounds like it could be interesting, but I don't think you really got to anything to interesting in chapter 1, and the writing wasn't compelling enough on it's own either. I could go through line by line on a lot of stuff. But in summary of my take on Chapter 1:
> I felt you were taking too long to describe things we could easily understand without the long unoriginal description.
Right off the bat, the first sentence I felt was really uninspiring.
>The October day was hot, a damp, oppressive heat that clung to the skin despite the overcast sky and the constant drizzle.
It just seems like you're describing muggy whether in the most direct way possible. There is nothing in this sentence that gives a hint at your style, world, characterization. If you think about it the first sentence is the most important in the book.
Then on the opposite end, I get you're trying to do a slow reveal about what this post-societal breakdown American world is, but I've already read a lot of stories like that, and you're not giving and hints of anything that are particularly fascinating yet. I guess this line was the most but I have no idea what it means:
>Thirteen stripes, but where the stars should have been, a single Star of David was pierced by a cross.

Also you use some language kinda over and over again.
>The engine roared in protest,
>The truck groaned in protest
That's like absolutely too much but even this:
> the roar of the engine settling back into a labored grumble.
Then you just flat out tell us "I'm trying to personify the truck"
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>>46772
>Sam froze. He knew what that meant. The "societal hygiene" check. The medical screenings. And he, sporting a hood, knew exactly what kind of "dick haircut" that would earn him. No.
I just realized what you meant. Like they're going to circumcise him if he's uncircumcised? If that's what you meant I think you need to elaborate more on that point lol. It seriously flew right past me because it's not something I would typically read in a novel.
>And he, sporting a hood
You're being way too euphemistic lol.

>>46830
>>46829
But that's my general point. Spend more time with the interesting stuff instead of the filler. If this is a world of forces circumcisions by Jewish Nazis or whatever, give us more of that.

>"people" are publishing ai slopfics for dead fandoms
Why? Seriously, why? What is the fucking reason? You're not going to become internet famous. You're not going to land a publishing deal out of this. Your audience is a dozen autists. Why are you fucking doing this?

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>>42516
>usually

spidercels rise up! reject maneater thots!

>>24698
This guy has a shitton of animations. Their Statue of Liberty stuff is prime for communist meme edits btw.

>>19013
>SCP-ОТ ВИНТА! | (049 | MEME | ANIMATIC)
>by Makart

does anyone here like 001 three little piggies or whatever its called and similar absurdist scps/articles

SCP-9835 aka Fat Vomiting Man

Anyone else notice how shit the quality of store bought clothes are now (at least in the uk)? Like i used to buy tshirts and collared shirts from places like m&s and next but after a few wash cycles they go to shit (for collared shirts the fabric goes loose and starts leaving hug gaps around the neckline and tshirt collars become crumpled and warped).

Feels like you have to shell out shitloads of money just to get anything that'll last more than 6 months

these jean paul gaultier shirts look like how a twitter fanartist draws top surgery scars

Ok, so does anybody know where i can get this jacket? There is a site called "glitch cupids" that has it on there but it has been out of stock for years and doesn't seem to be restocking anytime soon - so anybody know any underground places i might find it?

>>46821
should add it's the OSCill X Feiyue Labourer jacket

some brake pads are a pain in the ass to change, others less so. look and see if there is a forum dedicated to your brand of car, and also videos as the other anon suggest
I have a Citroën, so everything runs on the one hydraulic system, which is self-de-airing. I'm also friends with a Citroën nerd which comes in handy. I let him keep his cars on my yard in exchange for him helping me every now and then
I managed to diagnose some ABS problems this year, which turned out to be electrical. fixed some wiring and installed a bypass switch for connecting the ABS light to the airbag light so that the car would pass inspect while I wait for parts
do try to find as much documentation on your car as possible. for mine I got several GB of documents from my buddy, which includes
>workshop manual
>full electrical schematics in French >_<
>Haynes manual
>a bajillion archived websites with information
$1500 sounds excessive for the work involved in just fixing the brakes. I paid $900 to have the wheel bearings changed on my car and that's a way bigger job

>>46783
>forgetting to loose deez nuts before jacking up the car
classic

Update: I changed the pads and brake fluid and went for a test drive and everything seems to be in order. It was a lot of fucking work and I cut myself several times but it only cost me about $80. I don't have an impact driver nor sockets that fit the lugnuts so I had to use the horrible miniature tire iron that comes with the car to take all the wheels off and put them back on. The most annoying part was pushing the pistons back into the calipers because I don't have C-clamps so I had to use crappy squeeze clamps which really sucked. I also forgot to loosen the lugnuts before jacking up the car and had to try again. I think I've forgotten to do that every single time I've ever jacked up a car.

hoping to pay my dad a visit soon so I can borrow his garage and change the ABS sensor on my car

>>46795

I miss being able to steal tools from my dad.

>>46753
potato anon here again. picked some today, Timo and Queen Anne. boiling up some of the latter to see if they're good. most of them went in the "to be planted next year" box due to green spots. will harvest more tomorrow, because I still have
>more Queen Anne
>Almond potatoes
>King Edward

>>46763
update: the Queen Annes were good. could maybe have boiled them for a few more minutes

>>46763
brought the almond potatoes to a party which were turned into gratiné and much appreciated by the guests
it's not a lot of potatoes for the amount of work, but the fact that I successfully grew them and that I have seed potatoes for next year is pleasing

I've thought about getting into gardening for myself, I learned some stuff about it as a kid when my family grew a vegetable garden in the backyard for many years. I'm not really clear on what "permaculture" is or what the benefits of it are exactly compared to traditional gardening, but the way I learned to do it was to first start a compost pile, throw lawn clippings in there and use a lawnmower to chop up raked leaves and pine needles and sticks and shit like that throw it in the compost pile as well and mix it around with a stick every few days or so to air it out, then when you have enough compost for the size garden you want go buy/rent a gas roto-tiller and buy bags of composted manure from a farmer's market, 4 parts composted cow shit, 1 part composted chicken shit for extra phosphorus, till a plot mixing your compost and cow and chicken shit with the natural dirt and just plant according to the season, also bury food scraps, egg shells, fish/animal carcasses in the garden, avoid synthetic fertilizers, etc. I don't know if this is the right way to do it but it seemed like it worked pretty well.

Getting close to wrapping up Zola's La Débâcle about the utter misery of the Franco Prussian war, from the peasantry, to the army rank and file, all the way up to Napoleon III himself. He's done a great job of building up a sense of scale for the sizes of the armies and the landscape of northeastern France, then painting a picture of a landscape peppered with the debris of battle and flooded with torrents of shattered men and the victorious Prussians. Also love the way that even the largely defeated men can turn on a dime when they have nothing left to lose.
I've previously read Zola's Germinal, about a coal mining village in France developing class consciousness but then being utterly defeated. I definitely recommend it if you're not interested in constant talk about army maneuvers.
Anyone recently read any interesting fiction that they would recommend me? I want to read several more fiction pieces before I dive back into historical literature, I find that fiction does a better job of improving my reading stamina. Even memoirs can do the trick tbh.

i read le rivage des syrtes last month
in it we become acquainted with the venerable and illustrious country of orsenna, a country somewhere in some mediterranean sea experiencing some hundreds of years of peace after an unfinished war, outwardly rich and peaceful, the people of orsenna have grown restless beneath the surface as society slowly decays and retreats from the borders to take refuge in the heartland.
in front of orsenna and across the sea lies the country of farghestan, a sleeping giant of an oriental amalgam and perennial foe. the people of orsenna have been forbidden contact with farghestan after the last war and contact on their end has also stopped after farghestan collapsed into petty feudal clan wars yet now strange and mysterious forces are at work in farghestan just as in orsenna the people cry out for change, for something that makes them step out of their monotony and allows them to feel something new, no matter if the cost is the likely self-immolation of orsenna.

the book makes an excellent work of creating an atmosphere of foreboding, that something ominous and ineluctable is on the horizon even as you scream at the characters to get a fucking grip on themselves! and think about the consequences but they can't stop and even if they know what might happen they care not for they're sick and tired of the never ending peace.

excellent book to read if you're an fsl (french as a second language), the writing is very beautiful but you do need a somewhat high vocabulary to enjoy it. lots of florid internal monologue and reminiscence. don't know how well translated the english version is.

>>46696
forgot to add that i can't help but being reminded of the current state of the world in some aspects or with regards to certain people when reading it which gives it a certain layer of grimness

>>45585
Kolya Krassotkin is a predecessor to Cuno from Disco Elysium.

>>46696
sounds interesting i'll try take a look at this in translation

>>45013
>I also used to think it would be cool to see female space marines (I like Samus Aran) but now I know the lore and the fact that Sisters of Battle exist.
On the other hand, trans space marines can still be a thing. Like, space marines were already turned into these giant throbbling pieces of meat so they already had surgery on their bodies technically, it only makes sense to go even further and just transition.

>>46521
AI slop

>>3335
Yea theres kind of a nice (seems to me very deliberately) meta-textual irony in the 40K lore where Chaos, this big evil Other that is supposed to be the justification for mankind being this militaristic fascist hellhole, is actually the product of this millitaristic fascist hellhole itself. The empire of man is literally shadowboxing its own repressed subconscious manifesting in the warp. Kind of a parody of how fascism tends to scapegoat its own internal contradictions on outside forces. Something the chud warhammer fans generally dont seem to pick up on.

>>20454
>Ward is liberal
Wildbow predicted the rise of "titans" who cause the foundations of the world order to crack

Worm was a story about the collapse of liberalism into neofeudalism, as seen in Hurricane Katrina. Its sequel Ward is about how these inhuman tech oligarchs like Elon Musk are far above normal bourgeoisie, just as Porky capitalists are above workers. That's why Glory Girl is so triggered by the idea of titans being way stronger than her where regular people are like "lol its just Thursday for us, relax". This accelerationism trend of wealth accumulation towards the ultra powerful makes the "petite" bourgeois class very offended by the idea that Elon Musk has exponentially more hegemony than they ever will. Taking control over the firmament on which we all stand isn't fair!!!

>“I’m on a brink, and I can’t see it, but I can feel it,” the man said.
>“Try not to think about it,” Rocketround said. “Okay?”
>“I can feel it,” the man said. He wasn’t paying much attention to Rocketround. “All the way down to this vast well, partially filled with potential energy. Like I’m on the lip of a volcano and it’s an impossibly long fall with only magma at the bottom. I don’t know if I’m better off throwing myself down into that or leaving it alone.”
>“Leave it alone,” I said, my voice joining more than one other person’s.
<“What if my thoughts and brain get made into a part of that? One piece in that thing’s construction. What if it makes me immortal, forever a part of this thing? A recording of me in there, how I think, how I do things.”
>“We’ve studied parahumans, powers and power sources a lot,” Roadblock said. “We’re pretty sure that’s not a thing.”
>“Yeah,” the guy in the clearing’s center said. “But…”
>He trailed off.
>“It’s not a thing,” Rocketround’s voice joined Roadblock’s.
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Anyone following his latest story? How is it going?

is stalin canon in the world of pikachu or whatever

>>46727
Only in the first game when the US existed.

>>46726
every niche fiction community has someone that makes most of the daily contributions so you should just ask this question in wildbow's discord server

>>46553
>the Schwartz(tm)
Please say sike

>>46283
>>46294
Apparently they crammed like 4 seasons into one or something lol

>>46123
So I do this largely forum-based RP and one of the big things there is 'faction' RP, where there's a big emphasis put on geopolitical stuff. Since like 2019 I was doing RP partly as an exercise in social fiction. I also run a character who left the Jedi Order because it was full of idealist pussies and liberals. He has since become Mand'alor and rides a boomer-ass Basilisk droid into battle, it's kino shit.

The Solidarity started as a coalition of Outer Rim spacers, droids, and AGIs who rose out of a massive slave revolt during the Hutts’ collapse. By ~300 ABY, they’ve grown into a hyperstate of around 100,000 planets, running on a centrally planned economy and labor-credit system. Their alliance with the Republic is pragmatic: both need each other against the Sith, but the Republic also keeps ties with the Hutts, who are quietly reviving slavery as debt peonage.

Militarily, the Solidarity fields smaller but far higher-quality forces than their rivals, avoiding clone or droid armies out of principle; they uphold a “joint dictatorship of the organic and synthetic proletariats.” They’ve just finished a war that quadrupled their territory and can’t sustain more fighting, so their focus is political: undermining and delegitimizing the Hutts while preparing their own Force traditions alongside the Jedi.

This is great anon
>I ended up eventualy selling it on Reverb for a wee profit
The synth module too?

>>46715

Yeah I sold the whole thing as a standalone instrument.